■ 제시문

A gift can contribute to a child's development. If I had to give a gift to help a child develop, I would choose a world map, because children could see the world from a wide viewpoint, make visions for the future, and know about other countries in the world.

First and foremost, a world map would help children to see the world from a broader and wider point of view. Children do not know about the world, because they don't have the chance to experience it as they live in a fixed environment. Through the world map, children could realize the fact that the world is huge and be more curious about it.

Second, children could make visions for their future. Children could later be travelers, or diplomats, and travel from place to place. For example, Han Bi-Ya, a traveler, who traveled around the world many times, wrote in her book that the world map which her parents bought her helped her dream about traveling.

Third, it is easy for children to know about different countries in the world. There are a lot of countries and children could know their locations and features through the map. Also, they could find information about the countries they are interested in.

To conclude, I would choose a world map to help a child develop, because they could see the world more widely, set visions, and know about various countries in the world. Even though books and dolls could be a good thing for a child's development, I think the world map is better.

■ 이해력 높이기

1. What kind of gift does the writer think is best to give to children?

(A) Books

(B) Dolls

(C) World map

2. What specific example does the writer use to show how world maps can be beneficial to children?

(A) The world traveler Han Bi-Ya.

(B) Doing well in her geography class.

(C) Being able to travel to many countries.

3. Why would a world map be a good present?

(A) It is a very colorful decoration for a wall.

(B) It contributes to children's development.

(C) They are cheap but a lot of fun.

정답: 1(C), 2(A), 3(B)

◎ 써서 보내요

A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child's development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why?

연말연시는 아무래도 선물을 주고받는 마음 훈훈한 시간이다. 여러분들도 선물을 주고 받았을 것이다. 그렇다면 과연 아이의 발달을 돕는 선물로는 무엇이 있을까. 이번 기회에 생각을 해 보고 멋지게 글로도 옮겨보자.

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■ 논제

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

우리 학생들도 지금까지 다양한 형태의 여행을 해 보았을 것이다. 여행 가이드에 의한 단체 여행이 가장 좋은 여행방법이라고 생각하는가? 자신의 경험을 토대로 해서 자신의 생각을 명쾌하게 밝혀 보자.

■ 학생글

곽준영·경기 범계 중학교 2학년-I prefer traveling alone

People usually choose whether to travel alone or in group whenever they travel somewhere new. In my case, I prefer traveling alone rather than traveling in group for the following reasons. First, I can choose where to go according to my interest. Second, I feel freer traveling alone. Third, planning places to travel give me more impression on the place I visit. I will explain this with two different experiences on trip to Jeju island and Thailand.

The first reason why I prefer traveling alone is that I can choose where to go according to my interest. If we travel in group, the schedule is already planned with places that most people would like. However, some places do not meet my interest. For example, when I went to Thailand three years ago, I was sleeping all through the travel that nothing except going to zoo seemed interesting to me. As another example, when I went to Jeju island few months ago, I traveled with my family and could go around the places that I wanted to visit. I really enjoyed it.

The second reason is that I feel freer traveling alone. When we travel in group, we have limited time in places to visit. For instance, an hour to look around a zoo. It depends on me how much time I want to spend there. I can spend more time there if I like to see around in certain places. However, time is limited while traveling in group. For example, when I went to Thailand, I did not want to spend much time shopping around there. However, judged by the fact that many people to, I had to stay there for a long time meaninglessly.

The last reason is that planning places to travel give me more impression on the place I visit. If I travel alone, it is me who have to plan all the places to visit and schedule time table. This would require lots of work researching about the places that I visit and would I find it easier to understand about those places. For instance, I really forgot what I did in Thailand that I did not have interest in where I was visiting and could not easily understand about the places I visited easily. However, In a trip few months ago to Jeju Island, I planned all the schedule and researched about the places that I wanted to visit. By doing this, I could participate more while I was traveling and understand about the places I visited.

To conclude, I prefer traveling alone that I can choose places to visit according to my interest, I will not be limited in time to visit certain places that I do not like to spend too much time, and by planning places to visit and researching about them by my hand, and I can participate more while traveling and understand about the places much easier. I really enjoyed traveling only with my family to Jeju island and is planning to visit Japan just like this. Then, I would probably enjoy the trip to Japan, too.

■ 첨삭글

People usually choose whether to travel alone or in group whenever they travel somewhere new. In my case, I prefer traveling alone rather than traveling in a group for the following reasons: first, I can choose where to go according to my interest second, I feel freer traveling alone and third, planning places to travel gives me more impressions of the places I visit. I will explain this with two different experiences, which were my trips to Island and Thailand.

The first reason why I prefer traveling alone is that I can choose where to go according to my interest. If we travel in a group, is already with places that most people would like. However, some places do not meet my interest. For example, when I went to Thailand years ago, I sleeping all through the travel because nothing, except going to a zoo, seemed interesting to me. example, when I went to Jeju Island a few months ago, I traveled with my family and could go to the places that I wanted to visit. I really enjoyed it.

The second reason that I feel freer traveling alone. When we travel in a group, we have limited time to visit each place. For instance, we only had an hour look around in Thailand. The amount of time I spend in each place should depend on me. I can spend more time in a certain place if I want to look around. However, time is limited traveling in a group. For example, when I went to Thailand, I did not want to spend much time shopping there. Based on the fact that many people wanted to shop, I had to stay there for a long time meaninglessly.

The last reason is that planning places to travel gives me more impressions of the places I visit. If I travel alone, I have to plan all the places to visit and schedule a time table. This would require lots of work researching about the places that I visit, and I would find it easier to understand those places. For instance, I really forgot what I did in Thailand because I did not have any interest in where I was visiting and could not easily understand the places I visited. However, on my trip a few months ago to Jeju Island, I planned the whole schedule and researched the places that I wanted to visit. By doing this, I could participate more while I was traveling and understand the places I visited.

To conclude, I prefer traveling alone because I can choose places to visit according to my interest, I will not be limited to visiting certain places that I do not like for a long period of time, I can plan places to visit and research them on my own, I can participate more while traveling, and I can understand the places much easier. I really enjoyed traveling only with my family to Jeju Island, and we are planning to visit Japan just like this. Therefore, I will probably enjoy the trip to Japan, too.

■ 총평

곽준영 학생의 에세이는 다음 세 가지 장점을 가지고 있다. 우선 글의 구성이 좋고, 훌륭한 예를 들고 있으며, 끝으로 문법도 완벽에 가깝다. 이렇게 세 가지 점들이 잘 갖춰져 있으면 좋은 점수를 받을 수 있다. 반면에 다른 두 가지가 훌륭하다 하더라고 한 가지가 약하면 좋은 점수를 받을 수 없다.

그럼 준영 학생의 에세이에서 이 세 가지를 하나씩 살펴보자.

먼저 구성 면에서 봤을 때 이 에세이는 서론에서 논지가 강렬하고 그 바탕이 되는 아이이어도 윤곽을 잘 잡아놓았다. 본문은 구성이 훌륭하다. 세 문단을 비슷한 주제문으로 연결시켜 놓았고 전체적인 내용에서 세부적인 내용으로 잘 전재하고 있다. 결론에서는 아이디어들을 잘 요약해 놓았을 뿐만 아니라 흥미로운 문장으로 끝맺고 있다. 간단히 말하면 글을 쭉 따라가면서 읽기가 쉽게 되어 있다. 둘째로, 사용한 예들이 매우 구체적이다. 준영 학생은 여행지의 이름을 명시하고 자신이 한 구체적인 활동들을 언급했으며, 왜 좋았는지 싫었는지를 설명하고 있다. 따라서 우리 독자는 저자의 입장에서 상황 별로 느꼈을 감정을 이해할 수 있다.

훌륭한 에세이를 쓰는데 가장 어려운 점은 문법이다. 이 부분에서 약점을 가지고 있다면 단시간 내에 해결할 수는 없다. 계속 연습을 통해 실력을 쌓아 나아가는 길밖에 없기 때문이다. 간단히 말하면, 단문을 사용하고 대신 연결어를 적절히 이용하는 수밖에 없다는 것이다. 단문을 사용함으로써 문장을 너무 길어지지 않게 하여 문장이 길어지면서 생길 수 있는 문법적 오류를 피하는 것이다. 동시에 적절한 연결어를 이용하여 문장을 연결하는 것이 매우 중요하다. 이 에세이에서 보자면 ‘For instance’ ‘However’ ‘By doing this’와 같은 말들이 좋은 연결어의 예로 들 수 있다. 이런 연결어들이 에세이의 흐름을 부드럽게 해주는 것이다.

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